All Comments on 'The Girl from Nepal Ch. 10'

Where can I get one of my own?

We waited 4 the climax of this story and it was just a mess! Needs severe editing. The action is extremely rushed and the gramatics are horrendous! I have enjoyed all of your writing up untill this point. Some readers may disagree but this is my honest analysis.

Interesting chapter but there's zero explanation on why they had to complete tier 3 ASAP, why others had to be present, or why her feelings were influencing her mother's arrousal. There are so many unexplained holes in this story.