by dragontatto
Interesting chapter but there's zero explanation on why they had to complete tier 3 ASAP, why others had to be present, or why her feelings were influencing her mother's arrousal. There are so many unexplained holes in this story.
We waited 4 the climax of this story and it was just a mess! Needs severe editing. The action is extremely rushed and the gramatics are horrendous! I have enjoyed all of your writing up untill this point. Some readers may disagree but this is my honest analysis.