All Comments on 'The House of Maucco Ch. 01'

by Roukley

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AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
LEARN TO WRITE A SHORT CLEAR SENTENCE

Rambling thoughts may inhabit your brain but the reader imagines it diffrently. My experiences and yours are not the same. And, your nieghbor has lived a life other than yours. Give us, the readers, an opportunity to filter your story through our expeiences by writing unadorned sentences. A rambling thought, which most of your work is just bores me.

And another thing. That porn picture you try forceing us to use is quaint but proves what I am telling you. We do not all own, nor want to own, a thousand actor pictures and bios. So leave that shit on your desk as a template and don't try to steer us with your muse. We as readers can do a fine job of putting characters together from our interpretation of your words. The face we want to see on a character is our reality.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
I liked it

Not the most likable characters, but then again, they're mafia. But damn if this didn't already start hot.

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