All Comments on 'The House of Maucco Ch. 01'

Not the most likable characters, but then again, they're mafia. But damn if this didn't already start hot.

Rambling thoughts may inhabit your brain but the reader imagines it diffrently. My experiences and yours are not the same. And, your nieghbor has lived a life other than yours. Give us, the readers, an opportunity to filter your story through our expeiences by writing unadorned sentences. A rambling thought, which most of your work is just bores me.

And another thing. That porn picture you try forceing us to use is quaint but proves what I am telling you. We do not all own, nor want to own, a thousand actor pictures and bios. So leave that shit on your desk as a template and don't try to steer us with your muse. We as readers can do a fine job of putting characters together from our interpretation of your words. The face we want to see on a character is our reality.