All Comments on 'The Hypnotist Ch. 01'

I enjoyed the story but I kept getting thrown off by the change in how you say..person, like first,second,third. Here is an example: "The words barely escaped his mouth as he flipped her on her hands and knees and thrust into her again, wanting to see her plump ass before I came."

Yeah, sorry about that. Normally when I write it's always in third person so it was pretty difficult to try and get it completely in first person. I had to go over it a couple times and even then I didn't get all of the parts that were flipped around unfortunately.

Ugh. Great premise, poorly executed. Couldn't finish it

You got to type more bro