All Comments on 'The Lessons Ch. 05'

This story is suffering from the mega-paragraph problem, making it difficult to read. One simple rule: every time the focus changes from one person to another, start a new paragraph.

For instance this:

"Very good Alan. I think you have provided an excellent sample of sperm for our study. I bet Miss Harding will be very pleased." "Thank you, Theresa, I did the best I could," he responded breathlessly.

becomes this:

"Very good Alan. I think you have provided an excellent sample of sperm for our study. I bet Miss Harding will be very pleased."

"Thank you, Theresa, I did the best I could," he responded breathlessly.

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But this isn't just true for quotes, it's the same for descriptions. If one is writing about what Miss Harding is doing and then switches to what Mr. Peters is doing, start a new paragraph right at that transition. It makes reading so much easier!

The plural of penis is penises (or, if you prefer, penes); a plural is NEVER made by using an apostrophe.

The facial colour caused by embarrassment is beet red, not beat red.

Who cares how you spell penises when someone is playing with it like this.

Write some more.

LMAO ! This should start a New Category - "Comedy"

and yes although there were some comical areas i didn't think it should be a laughable story, and i had no problem reading it but then again i'm just a reader not a author etc. i enjoyed this story and hope to read on more...this one could go along time with all the material you've set up for it. MORE please;) respectfully a fan in Texas naynay

You've got fantastic descriptive language that helps me picture what it actually feels like- such simple language as "small, soft hands" and "pigtails and braces" or how you describe the curvature of a creamy white leg meeting the luscious mound between the legs. However, your "climactic moments" don't really spurt. I think your writing would be even more orgasmic for us readers if you concentrated your imagery at the moments of nirvanic release.

FOCUS ON THE CLIMACTIC MOMENTS.

Thank you for your incredible contributions to my moments of release!

..with the first comment. Breaking it up into paragraphs makes it easier to read and less likely that people will just "skim" a paragraph.

All that aside, great story, please keep writing!

wanting to experiment with each other, things are looking up for a very hot conclusion to the school year. I don't know about sex in the math class, but it is surely going to be happening around the campus in short order. And, I'm going to be right there, too, stroking along with the best of them. I marvel at your imagination but even more at your means of conveying it to the rest of us. Thanks.

Well, Charles,

I love your stories. I love your faculty and their imaginative efforts to achieve learning and discipline simultaneously. But your voiceactivated software production needs to be proof edited for synonyms, eg., beat vs. beet; passed vs. past; knew vs. new; etc. good voice activated software would always highlight every synonym in blinking red until it was edited.

Cheers, don't let it stop your contributions.

Was a vision of pleasure on everyone - lol - a good series

Another truly inspired and entertaining read in this series! I love the lightness, and once again laughing out loud. Just so charming...thanks again...hcl

More of a humor satire story imho

Gripping read!

Be careful, Mary Sue didn't make a handjob to Alan, but to Alex

Really good story, but inconsistent.

Some of the names get mixed up occasionally