All Comments on 'The Loyal Servant'

This is the Erotic Coupling section, NOT the Non-English section, mate. Get it right next time ok?

Abey chutiye teri behn ki chut gando ye story likhi hai ya apni behn chudai hai maa k. loudy

gando ye bata tu ny kitni bar gand marai chutiye

Could be a good story.....?

The above idiotic comments aside. It was a well plotted story, it should have been in Non English of course, But the telling of the tale and structure could have been better. You should not stop writing. Need help with editing and other matter contact me.