All Comments on 'The Lunatic Hour Ch. 01'

You almost lost me in the first paragraph with the exaggerated description but then I got to "Dramatic much, Troy?" and realized it was part of the dialogue in his head. You did a good job of providing some character background and physical information on Troy that was realistic and not included in the story just for the erotic value. I liked that Troy's assessments and observations of Parker were not vulgar or crude. The dialogue was realistic and the characters come across as true to life. The 'marco, polo' bit was endearing and added to the sense of hope that Troy was beginning to feel. I look forward to more of the story and hope that it lives up to this first impression.