All Comments on 'The Magician Ch. 01'

The multiple personality/persona was a creative idea but as a story, it didn't work very well.

I can see the need to have some disguises in an occupation involving clandestine investigations, but dissociative identity disorder is kind of a far stretch. I know for a fact some guys prefer to have sex as a man sometimes, and other times as a woman, but theres no evidence of any correlative in chapter 1.

Another of your shitty stories.

I am impressed that you were able to keep travck of who you thought David might have been diguised as having pretended to imitate. Right?

Ambitious project. Good luck and thanks for writing.

the open marriage, there was no inclusion of Marcus as being in the no date without prior premission. His staff needs to be fired, takijng the side of an unfaithful wife over an innocent husband, you appartenly cannot buy loyalty.

Almost all of the time, you set up the wife as voluntarily going out to be screwed by a big black dude and when all is over the husband takes whatever is left weither cum in the cunt or just a completed sex series and says it is alright, the wife can be unfaithful and can continue the husband will take whatever she has left for him, if anything. It is time you left the practive of writing wimp stories and write where the husband has self pride or a belief in marriage vows, once violated over. It is hard to see just where and when the marriage vows should be only on one side.

Stop recycling story, plot & dialog do something original.

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