All Comments on 'The Neighbor'

Another nail in the literotica coffin. Its mentally ill cuck crap like this that's killing literotica. There are no good stories here any longer, just cucks and more cucks.

But it has been done to death on this site. Good luck on future stories.

I guess this is the new version. It was well enough written and you have obviously aimed your story at a certain type of readership. Don't worry the swingers and open marriage and cuck readers will love this story.

The only course of action to most people is to confront the wife and kill the neighbour. I guess that won't happen and the wife will continue to cheat on the husband, sad story.

but RAPE stories do not belong in LW catagory. Any man that will stand by and let his wife be raped should have his balls cut off.

But just another bitch writers sick fantasy of a wimpy hubby. Even hot sex won't get you more than one star.

don't listen to these other people, I thought it was a good story, I hope you write more like this.

Waiting to see if this is just another WACC Job (Wuss As Castrated Cuckold) story or one we can actually relate to. Star rating upon final chapter

sue the neighbor and divorce the slut

and for damn sure never touch her again, if the neighbor is fucking her he is fucking others, god knows what diseases she has now

I'll not waste my time considering the idiotic comments of the anon's they're useless because they are too afraid of receiving a comment back, chicken shit is what they are. I liked this because the sex is good, the confused thoughts of the husband and the expected confrontation not yet realized.

I'd love to see this continued, see where you take it, will the husband accept, will he take control, so many possibilities but most interesting to me will be to see what you do with it.

Kevin

I had a hard time with the premise that a wife would bring a lover to her bed for a cunt licking and expect it to end there.

That said, the only other comment would be to try to reduce the number of times you use the words 'he or his'. I didn't think to copy your exact wording but when you are writing in the third person the reader only needs a few reminders. For example instead of

"He quietly opened the door and checked his camera one more time. He paused to see if the scene had changed before he raised it to record the scene."

Better would be:

"He quietly opened the door and checked the camera settings one more time. Pausing to see if the scene had changed, he raised it to record the scene."

Even better assuming his name was David:

"Her husband quietly opened the door and checked the camera settings one more time. Pausing to see if the scene had changed, David raised it to record the scene."

I'll be interested to read part 2

Get over it. I hope you're feeling better now that you got your ravings off your chest. Why does it bother you so much what others think? Your stories seem to be doing okay, so why the nasty comment to those that wish to remain anonymous. If this author doesn't wish to accept anon comments, she does have the option of not allowing them. What's more disturbing is the high and mighty attitude of people like yourself who think you're somehow better because you have a fake name.

Author, I'll read this story and will comment privately. No use upsetting the sensitive readers here. ML

He should show the vid to his whore wife along with divorce papers. Then have Charlie meet with an accident

Return Charlie's weed eater on Wednesday, but whack his nuts.

He has hung out with Charlie for three years and does not recognize him? Maybe he was in the wrong house.

For me the story was OK, but I wanted to comment on a previous anonymous post. The comment was right on--why do people like complain about people leaving anonymous remarks when really, aren't every one us anonymous on here? Take it easy Spunk--I quite sure that that isn't your real name!

There are so many things wrong with this story I don't know where to start. First the writer switches tenses throughout the story. Why doesn't he bust in and stop them, no balls or is he getting off on it. Where did the camera come from? Three years as his neighbor and he doesn't recognize him? Unbelievable! Now what's he going to do?

Come on Kevin Spunk; you know where this is going... the writer is a bi female. So, he'll suck Charlie's spunk out of the wife and then Charlie will fuck him. Good grief, the cucks will love it.

If you were any man at all you would toss them both out of your home. But no..you got so hot and bothered at the sight of his cock you jacked off. You are a pitiful excuse for a man. Oh mr. writer I am talking to you ..who can write crap like this unless you are queer, a cocksucker,,a fudge paker,,a homo, a worthlesspansey,,you wimp

I believe I read nearly the same first 1000 words before...

She is supposed to love her husband?

I'd hate to see what would happen if she didn't care what he thought of her, she'd probably have a whole room full of guys fucking her.

She wasn't the least bit remorseful of cheating on her husband, and the only thing she would be sorry for is when she gets caught. That kind of makes her a slut.

Not too bad of writing, and the construction of the story was fairly good, but the storyline really sucks.

With the husband acting like a wimp, and no revenge in sight, the story falls short of being one of having satisfying results to the reader.

Did this really make your little willy hard? Puke!

I am so tired of having wimp hubbies watching their wives with other men ! Why not enjoy thresomes or moresomes with the hubby included from the beginning

Obviously all you haters are clueless, the first clue is the authors name, Kaytlyn, then of course there is the author's bio clearly stating the author is a lady.....duh.

I liked this story and the others you have written, thank you.

can't say i liked the plot, but i suppose it could happen. disagree though on a couple of commenters refering to 'hot sex'... i didn't find it hot at all.. and the 3rd person was annoying at best... keep working though.

Dear splendidspunk. Don't your tiny little brains by now realise that everybody on this site is anonymous. Or are you using your real live name? In that case I should compliment your parents with their execelent taste in name giving. Ohh yeah the story: What story?

Inadequate completion of the story. I have not read your other stories, but if you leave readers hanging the way you do in this story... you won't get the higher score you deserve and people will hesitate to return.

As old as the theme of slut wife and neighbour discovered by hubby is, your narration and detail connects with readers... so I ask... why the hell did you just stop when you had us all enthralled ? Now bloody well write a second and even third chapter and make sure hubby has a set of balls.

I wish you many a score of 4.50 and better.

It does need a couple more words …

first of all i disagree with one commentator below who wrote 'rape stories are not to be placed in LW category' . This is not a rape story. The wife agrees to have sex with Charlie. She even agrees to do it again. I think she is one of those people who like to think they are being forced to have sex but are inwardly loving each moment of it.

The male character, if he even was a male, was a clueless pathetic loser. He actually gets confused as to whether he should watch her wife fuck another man or go away from the door and not disturb the mating couple.

He strokes himself while watching his wife fuck and even makes a video of it. Now, the thought of leaving her didn't even enter his mind so don't tell me that the video was being recorded for revenge purposes. I think he secretly wanted to enjoy that scene when he was alone.

The last paragraph made me laugh out loud. He is contemplating as to whether he wants to wait for his wife to tell him about the encounter or whether he should tell her about the video himself. Didn't he just hear his wife agreeing to have another session with the neighbour? Didn't he hear her cries of pleasure? If he did then how can he acutally think that there is even a slight possibility that his wife will tell him anything about her cheating?

All in all this was for swingers. i think authors should issue a warning in such stories.

If he was tearing-up because she was screwing someone else at the beginning, why is he even having that internal decision to make? As I see it, once is a mistake, twice or more (or even thinking about it) is an affair. She said the only acceptable think to the neighbor, that she would not see him anymore. But, it didn't take much to change the mind of this so called 'loving wife' to continue on to a full blown affair. What he should do is to be there that Wedsnday, if she does anything...well, lets just say a divorce is easy to get. This bitch can not be trusted because she did this after asking her husband about doing it. Sounds like she was planning this from a while back, which makes her a slut of a cheating wife.

Comes from nowhere and goes nowhere.

it WACC to the 5th power

leave it to a woman to write about the wimp cuck.

I would directly to a divorce attorney's office and would not pass Go. The unfaithful slut would thought a local pussy hound would keep his word and not fuck her is simply too fucking dumb to have as a wife.

ANY husband and I mean ANY husband would have charged in when he realized it was a man that was using his wife, not a toy. If he did nothing more than call his wife a slut and storm out, she was busted! Divorce court here they come.

End the story at this point? Are you crazy? Divorce the bitch. You have the evidence of her cheating. Sue the neighbor. Take his money. Then burn his house down.

HA HA HA

Why begin a story if you finish it with questions....really important tion :

"There was also the fact he borrowed Charlie's weed eater and needed to return it. What the fuck!"

his neigbor fucked his wife and he thinks about some stuff he borrowed .... stupid story

...I pity you! "Hey, my wife just got all fucked up and almost raped in my bed - I did not interrupt (you know...no balls etc.) but I got a fantastic movie of it to get off by. "

Question: I know you are in good company as far as lack of backbone is concerned (no offense meant here); most writers here use "Cuckerotica" or "Wimperotica" to get off their submissiv side. I suggest a prolog to be included, expressing your state of mind. That way nobody will be offended or angry due to the lost time..

There in no one in this steaming pile of a story that I would trust to even sweep a sidewalk. At every juncture the jackass husband chooses the most fucked up path. I think this pathetic wimp will let the neighbor get away with raping his wife. Maybe in the end he is just embarrassed that he forgot to return Charlie's weed wacker

With that video??? Wow she will get fucked by the judge!! And Carlie will take a legal beating $$$$ !!!

Lady you are one hot lady and your hubby is one lucky man although I for one would not share you, but that is your man's choice.

JJ

... not only is the author almost illiterate, he or she can't develop a decent story.

Confront both of the cheaters. Tell his wife and go neuclar on both their asses.

wimp and whore.

What is the point of this half or quarter finished story?

Unless he stomps the neighbor and dumps the cheating whore, he is a cuck. Apparently, he is happy being a cuck.

I have a few questions if you please.

What is that fleshy-looking bit of anatomy in your name photo?

Why have you kept us waiting for over two years since your last story?

Where did you become such a smooth word crafter?

Is this going to have follow-on parts like many of your stories?

How often is Charlie going to make her fuck him?

Will it have a sad ending?

What IS sad in this case, anyway?

Hubby is now a wimpy duck with a slut wife.

Guess he is happy with it.

20 stars to writer making a fantasy come true

Yuch

Even cucks can be betrayed.

Pathetic wimp cuck.

Unfinished

I really wish there was a category for cuck stories, for those perverted guys out there with inferiority complexes that need this crap, and save me the painful (and infuriating exercise) of having to read the entire storyline to discover it. *sigh*

Hate wimpy cuck stories—unless a baseball bat is a key plot device! Writing is better than most of these, so I gave it a 2.