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All Comments on 'The Next Level Ch. 01'

by supersoakerMA

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eightballbumeightballbumover 16 years ago
Great start but.......

Needs a good proof reader. Many typo's that you didn't catch. Don't be in such a hurry to post a story. Over all you've set up a great scene for future chapters. Looking forward to reading them.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
To be continued?

Nice set up. It would have been nice to see it continued. It's never too late for a restart.

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