All Comments on 'The Novice'

Please do write more, this is a great begining!

for god's sake, you better finish this!!

Dude! Write more!

Please Write more

please please write more!

PLEASE write more. PLEASE. One of the best stories I've read...

Keep it going! Please!

This story's twist is AWESOME!!!! It's great! Please continue!!!

this is excellent,the mark of a professional writer,head and shoulder above the rest, certainly want to read more like this

Really,Really good.Hurry up with the next instalment.

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This story is fantastic, absolutely brillant please hurry up andwrite the next installment as i realy cannot hold on!

Keep this bitch a going

Beautiful story with such wanton expression! Looking forward to seeing more! please don't keep us waiting!

An enjoyable story - a veritable 'novice ripper'. Like 'Behind Convent Walls' this had all the delicious perversion and teasing seduction. Good writing. Well done

Love it! keep it coming, best erotica I have ever read.

I loved the plot twist!

Please write another chapter. One through three were amazing and I cant wait to read more.

really hot story!

Excellent story. Keep it coming, would love to read how it ends. the best story i have read.

Please oh please continue...

Please, I need you to continue. I've read this seven times, it isn't getting less powerful but if there were even more I would pass out with pleasure. Please, I want to know what I happens to her next so I can feel her enjoyment too.

This is the hottest story I have ever read..and I have rad many.

Please keep up the good work

please continue.what exciting,wicked tension,you have weaved.i am creamy wet,just as you intended.gem

THE BEST story on this website hands down. Very Hot and Sexy!!!

i thought everything from the conflcting brothers to the needy nuns was amazing, im dying to know how it will go, PLEASE MAKE ANOTHER

loved it. more more more.

It's an amazing piece of erotic fiction. Good strategy with delaying orgasms untill near the end. The foreplay was great. The "innocent nun" setting got me very turned on. But I screwed it up trying to hold off my orgasm yet not able to resist touching myself too much and got a half-orgasm on page 3. Dang. I don't usually like series, because the original idea that makes the fantasy erotic quickly wears off after too long a continuation, which is why I read solo pieces like this one. I do appreciate character development and gradual plot development and I feel that this story did so pretty well. This piece is great as a one-off, but I doubt any continuation would retain it's initial thrill. Well, Audrey pretty much isn't innocent anymore, is she?

I think this story has been the best yet I have read! So deliciously sexy.

this story is super hot and teases you with every word... I want more!

MORE MORE MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!

This is written like a Sabrina Jeffries novel, good writting skills in both the romance and literary perspective. Very hot, more would be lovely.

This was amazingly hot and wonderfully written. More!!

More please!!!

pleeaasseee!

I love the slow burn, the innocence, the undeniable hotness... Thank you. :-)

More, please?

This is amazing! Please write more!

Love it............more please!!!!!!!!

Yes!! Excellent story! PLEASE write more!

u write sensually..plz continue..

Please please please write more! It's such an awesome hot story! XD

~Wolf (Since there're so many "Anonymous" on here. :P)

You're a good writer and this is insanely hot.

WOW....your stories really deliver and yes please more of this story.

Ive never read such a hot, kinky, stimulating, yet interesting and eye catchin' story! Such a big turn-on! Please keep writting :) continue the story!

Loved this! All the story line of one of a historical romance, plus that next step kinky I have come to enjoy!

Please continue!!! I wanna read wat Lukas does next!!!! Kyaaah! Ian somerhalder!

It kinda reminds me of beauty by anne rice? I dunno maybe its coz i read a line somewhere

Beautifully written (and I can say, since I'm an editor). This is, by far, the BEST story I have read on this site - intensely arousing, and very satisfying from a literary angle as well. Please, please continue.

please continue writing! I loved it!

continue the story!

Please finish this and write more.

Great, loved it!

Please do another part of the story!!!....

It was really good! :p

MORE, MORE, MORE!!!

More......PLEASE!!!

More, More, More is all i can say

More More please ! I'm very into lucas!!

Please write more. I can see a wonderful ending coming here!

Yes, please continue this story...it is so good!

please continue!

Please please please write more!!!!! :D

I love the deep burning intensity of your writing.

I think you have what it takes for writing as a published author, the romance and the sex is quite believable.try writing a book. you can start by writing a thousand word a day, then increase to two thousand,will take you an hour, two at most per day. And in six months time you will be done, I have published books, and I used to write on websites as you do, until one day I decided to make an actual book.It paid really well in the end, so you should consider doing it:-D

Honestly, I feel like it was such an intense story from the start til the end as it easily captured the mood and feelings of realistic character.

Yes, yes, yes, yes, yes .... write more. Please. :-)

This story is well-written and exciting. The eroticism is just the perfect amount of lust and want, with a nice battle of good and evil. I am dying to know who gets her and how it happens. Please write more of this story, you are very talented!

oh yes this story left me hungry for more! I love that she doesnt have the typical large breasts. and the theme of good vs evil is fabulous!

Please, i want to know what happens next.

I have been reading your stories for quite a while, you are an amazing writer, I just love them, keep on the good work!!!

I have so enjoyed reading the stories that you have written. I see that you have already added to this series, yeah! As much as I think you should publish, I am glad that I can read these here, a bit of romance, mystery, intrigue and hot, hot sex.

Your writing reminds me of the gaudy furniture and decoration found in old Victorian houses: in short, you over-do it! The premise of your writing is excellent and exciting; but I think you should just write it without trying to be so over-the-top.

it's been awhile since I've found a tale that was so engaging. Damn fine work.

Love it! Amazingly hot, please keep it going!

After reading the Novice, I had to comment. I seldom say anything, but I really liked this story. I finished all four chapters.

This is amazingly captivating and so steamy. please continue this!

By all means, continue the story!! This was so very well written and so very steamy and erotic. It was delicious!

This is one of the finest examples of erotic writing I have experienced in quite some time. Please continue. It is mesmirizing.

Excellent writing!

call it teasing, edging what ever you wish. but its a very very long time since i read such an addictive story

Normally I can't get into the storylines of erotica, but you have created some very dynamic characters in this story that I can't wait to read more about! Please write more- will Lukas save Audrey from mathew? Excited for the next submission.

I love it. Please write more!!

Enjoyed it very much and glad to see that you continued the story. Just hope that it is complete.

Excellent.

I'm so glad there is more!

Loved it! I'm rooting for Lukas...I want more!

Very erotic,well written!

please?

This was absolutely amazingly written, with a strong plot. I love the twists, it keeps things interesting, & the sex scenes are so detailed!

More please?

What a delicious intriguing story! Looking forward to see who will take Audrey's virginity in the end, simply yummy!

One of the best I've read.. Please continue

Please please give us more of what happens to Audrey and Lucas. Don't stop.

yes

i'm into gothic and working on a paper on the goth Jews (and NOT Christians)--the history, etc. Actually, not Christians. Everybody knows about that. Boring.

(a lot of people don't know Judaism has gothic history, art, literature, etc. it's online--architecture, etc.

The gothic in Jewish culture--just look it up. It's fascinating. There's some quality like that of Gogol's "Dead Souls" --I think--in many of the stories. Darkness, raisins, cockroaches, cockroaches that look like raisins on the walls in an inn ... black bread and cabbage soup ... hard sausages--pickles? Not sure. I like them anyway. Wouldn't they be useful in a cold Russian climate? Preserved foods ... oh, and tea!)

i'm getting hungry

maybe girls get fucked on tables by innkeepers?)

One of the best young innocent girl stories I have read. Very exciting so far and I hope it has many more episodes.

Please continue this story

By chance, did you take adderall before commencing your "Gothic" paper?

Good story hope to see more

More please!

I love it! It is so sexy. I was not able to stop reading it !

Continue!

You have to keep going please please. I can't lie, I played with my cunt while I read this glorious story. I came shockingly hard at your words. MMM. I need more!

Needs a non-consent rough-and-tough mouth fuck. Just carry on.