All Comments on 'The Novice'

Absolutely wonderful from beginning to end, please continue I can't wait to read more of the little novice's adventures.

Beautifully written by the way.

That bastard Matthew! He's not exactly a winner, is he? But his brother, is it? Who is older...makes me wonder by how much, but still, I want to see more! And soon before I combust!

Wow! I was biting my nails hoping that Lukas would get to Audrey before his brother did. And at the same time I was panting from excitement. Super story, please continue. You are definitely my favorite Literotica author. Keep up the great work, and thanks!

What a wonderful story! i really hope you contine with it, and soon :)

Hot, good character developement, can't wait to see where you go with this. (Let Lukas have her before Mathew programs her)

I loved it! Please write more!

i got damn hard reading bout it. I want more :)

it was a joy to read because of the care taken to create paragraphs and proper use of periods, commas and so on.

and it was HOT!

write more please, and look into being published.

It is a cruel, cruel game to bring your reader this far and to deny them the pleasure that they seek. I am sitting on the brink of orgasm- and then nothing. I feel Lukas' pain.

Well done- please post the ending!

Hurry up, write more! This is awesome!

Delicious, cat and mouse story... which tiger will get his prize? Please continue with this story. Of course it would be grand that Lukas gets his little one, but then, life can be so complicated, no? A little taunting, a little denial with your readers. Love it!

I loved this story. I have read lots but this one had me wanting more. You are a good writer. I hopw you write more. Especially this story.

WORKED ME UP LIKE FEW OF THE OTHER STORIES DO.

This story along with all of your others are amazing. You're a talented writer and I hope to see a lot more from you in the future.

absolutely awesome story.....i can't wait for it to continue!

I loved the detail that you went into with the characters thoughts and feelings. It is so refreshing to see that someone actually takes the time to develop their characters, instead of just rushing into a badly-worded sex scene.

I thought for sure that Lukas was going to take her maidenhead but I wasn't prepared for the news that not only did he not take her virginity, but he is Father Matthews brother.I have to read more of Audrey's story, please continue?

giving us yet another great story for which we now have to agonizingly wait for the next chapter. Wasn't Innocent Pawn enough? How about Conquered? Captured? Vampire Seduction (we've been waiting since January for chapter 2)? Why do you torture us so? ;)

you MUST continue! i'm sorry to have rushed you with innocent pawn, ignore my whining and nagging. take all the time you want, but please please please please continue your stories. i love them. :)

It's been a long time since I have read something so erotic and sensual. Please continue. I can't wait until the next story.

God, i thought Innocent Pawn was Hot!! More please..

Dont let evil Matthew take innocence of Audrey.. i'm really intrigued by the character Lukas... would like more details bout his relationship with his brother...

still waiting and hoping for next installment of Innocent Pawn

Gary

Excellent. Beautifully dark and sensual. You should definitely continue :) I like your style. You're really one of the best erotica authors in LitE... in fact, you're better than most published authors I know.

You DO NOT even need to ask. PLEASE DO CONTINUE!!!

Do I want more of this incredible story?? Heck yea! This was another amazing story but I want to be greedy and perhaps ask for a nicely wrapped conclusion to ?Innocent Pawn?also?

He should knock her up

Wow. Just...Wow. Maybe I'll be able to offer some constructive criticsm next time around but this story is just...wow.

Great work. Please don't ever stop writing!

First of all, I think that this story is really good so far. It's really easy to beg for more chapters as soon as possible. However, being a writer myself, I realize that some times it is hard to write a continue. Also, if forced to write a continue it's possible to really wreck a story. So just write when you can and we'll just have to live with that. You are a really good writer.

I swear you have remarkable talent. Ahh I wish you would write a book so I can jus keep reading it lol. YES PLEASE CONTINUE THIS STORY. It's magnificient, as all your stories are, and it sorta reminds me of innocent pawn, i'm not sure why, jus somethin bout it. Anyways fantastic job. You got me wet! =) Mwah. XoXo

How could I not want to see more of this! It's great! I'll be keeping my eyes peeled for a sequel.

This story is hot. It's a bit more 'romancy' than the usual NC stories but still... very hot. More!

Fantastic story with hot, sexual tension. Two brothers is so very erotic.

The battle between evil and lesser-evil *smirks*

I would love to see which path sweet Audrey will take and which brother will gain not only her body but hopefully her heart as well.

My wife and I both love this story. Nuns are a taboo topic that appeals to every kinky catholic schoolboy and many girls. The development of the characters is superb and the pace is deliciously slow. Don't let me and all of the other readers down. Please continue!

Do continue!

My face is flushed with excitement for the next installment. Do hurry as my mind is racing with possibilities!

Can't stop now...you got to tell us what or will happen next.

Please finish the story! I ache to know what happens next.

I hope you will finish this story. It was one of the best of 2004.

I want more info on the brother...Where can I find him?

Keep writing you stories are very well done.

Please, I need more. It's a great, great, great, story; the best one I've ever read. We need another chapter. Thank you so much

Oh, you must must continue - you've woven entirely too yummy a story not to give us more!!!

This is truly delicious and wonderful reading - a perfect blend of raw sexual power and beautifully honed story-telling. Please do write more!

Very promising. I hope you continue this. You're truly great!

Gawd yes! Of course we want more! You are hands down the best writer I've read yet on this site. Keep it cumming, please. ;)

YES! Definately write more of this.This is really good stuff. I wish this man existed. He sounds so sexy! I would have been lost myself. Perhaps he will come to her rescue protecting her from his brother?

Hell yeah! Please continue with this story.

- JT

Awesome...keep going

Please please finish the story!

Beautifully written and sexy. Finish the story!

PLEASE finish this story. It's every girls fantasy!!!!

i loved the story. you definately need to continue it. It was wonderfully written with excellent detail and leaves little to the imagination which causes it to be read with no breaks. It was amazing. :-)

Excellent read. I (all of us) need more!

So hot... something about nuns and priests, if you know what I mean. Please, please finish!

I am shaking !!! Wonderfully, tremblingly erotic. I think I need to be a novice lol

As was said, there is something incredibly exciting about the Nun/Novice and Priest relationships if I dare use that inadequate word.

please keep writing, and i too love the idea of this mand coming to rescue audry from his brother and taking her for his own.

Pretty damn good; just the perfect mix of kink, noncon and seduction to make me love this :D

Dall, dark, mysterious stranger....Brothers at odds.... seduction of innocence....

You have to continue this story-please!!

It's every woman's fantasy

This is my first story of yours and after reading this... I must read more! Wonderfully imaginative, I love the characters (a nun and a father!?) and the idea that dark and sensual Lukas wants to save Audrey from his brother. Very yummy.

what a great story. totally disappointed that it ended....keep it going pleeaaassse. It made me so hot!!

Please continue the story, it made me so wet...I couldnt control myself !!!

This story left me so wet, please continue it! Now I have to be taken in a forest by a man with silvery eyes ;)

Don't stop

This was great reading. Please fininsh.

I brought myself almost to orgasm 4 times with this and wouldn't let myself come... my pussy is so wet it's dripping down my thighs... ohhhhhh I am going to be insanely hot for my boyfriend tonight.

Definitely finish this story. I cant wait to delve a little deeper into Father Matthews twisted mind.

This is a delicious story. Please continue it so we can find out who get her.

This is a great story. I love the way you have developed the characters and the tension between them. Please continue, it show great imagination and understanding.

Don't be a tease and leave us hanging,this must be continued

This is a sizzling story which is brilliantly crafted, you certainly have a way with words. I desperately want to be Audrey! The formula used in this story is outstanding, these seemingly wholesome yet incredibly dark and erotic characters are alluring to the reader and have left me begging for more. The story MUST continue.

Well, you really don't know the first thing about hymens, do you? I suggest you research a little.

Aside from that, though, this story is quite enjoyable.

Anotomical uncertainty re hymen. I dislike slang - e.g. 'cock', 'pussy', etc.; and I feel you use too many anotomical adjectives ('soft pink folds',etc.)but you write very well and you manage to convey thoughts and feelings, not merely actions. I thought that this was a well-written but predictable story. You have proven me wrong.

It is a very interesting story, though somewhat implausible, and beautifully told!

Do not let criticisms regarding anatomical correctness or use or overuse of descriptives hinder you in continuing this very intriguing and erotic story. This is fantasy, erotica... not a lesson in anatomy or sex education. Keep going the way you are... Great work!

You make me want to be her and I'm in love with Lukas already. A story that's very erotic without being vulgar and pornographic. I would love to read more.

Seriously, I loved it, and you have to finish it. Very Hot!!!

You have go to finish this ... i love the idea of it

I was looking for a short, hot story to read before I went to bed, and this one caught my eye. It wasn't as short as I thought, but it was one of the most interesting stories I've read on this site. please continue it!

This is by far one of the best stories on this site

is super hot. I've read two and I wish you would hurry with three...you are my idol..

Absolutely fantastic-hurry up with 4 can't wait to hear more.

Keep writing!

Awesome, awesome story!! PLEASE continue with this series!!! I wanna know what happens next!!!

Please please continue this story! It is great!

absolutely, write more! Classic and trashy; a great combo!

Definitely want more!

How can you even ask if we want the story finished? OMG... I'm dieing to see how it ends.... PLEASEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE finish it....pretty please?

Was browsing for ages for something to turn me on and finally I found your story - great stuff keep it up :)

that was hot as hell.. my cunt is throbbing

This is magnificent! I agree with other comments. I usually don't take time to post - but you HAVE to finish this story! You're writing is excellent - superior to most here!

Why is suppose to be so hot to write about sex without actually describing the sex in some detail. I am all for the imagination but how about a little more hard in your xxx.

Umm, that was pretty much

spectacular.

YOU HAVE TO WRITE MORE.

Please finish the story....it was awesome

please continue the story...i want him to take her completely. this story definitely made me wet.

i am glad to finally have some intelligent writers in here

please continue, and keep up the good work!

This story left me aching for more, please finish it!!!

That was awesome! Write more please!!

I couldnt stop reading this it was wonderfully wicked and delicious

You can't leave it like that!!!! Must find out what happens!!!! Very good - thank you. Best story I have read for ages :)))))

This is my first time making a comment but I just had to. You definately cannot leave us desparate readers hanging like that. This story is great a cross between hardcore erotica and romance. I love it. I didnt give it 100% only because the story is incomplete. So I guess it's tit for tat. You finsih the story you get 100% :-0

Enjoyed reading the story and hope there's more to follow.

i love it! the brother twist is excellent. write more!