All Comments on 'The Odd Couple Down The Road'

by Lion24655

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
Just great

Just a sexy read, well planed.

cookiejarcookiejarover 19 years ago
I agree...

With Scorpio. Great beginning but I had problems with the wife handing her husband over so easily. Maybe a little more set-up was needed. Were the couple swingers? It seemed very open minded of his wife but as a man's fantasy, it certainly worked. Anyway, it was different and I enjoyed it. :)

Scorpio44Scorpio44over 19 years ago
Great lead in,

Your story starts great, sets up the situation well and then seems to hurry to the ending.

The writing needs a bit of editing but is good. There are details that could have made the story more interesting, more intimate, hotter, and even more of a character study. What about his wife? She was very supportive, but stayed away while they played? They only play once?

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