All Comments on 'The Sitter Ch. 02'

The eye strain almost causes a person to stop reading. All the frequent and over use of "word ... word," "word - word," etc. in some places are far more than the text. Forget this trash style of writting and use the proper standard grammar which for indicating a pause or break to improve things.

Please explain what you mean, and its ironic that your grammar is so terrible....

The story is well thought out and the 2 characters each have a unique voice. Great 2nd chapter. And as a side, I don't know if you have a fastidious editor or what but you seem to have almost no typos, a welcome show of pride in your work.

For the next segment I can only see a shower or bath, possibly both (big bathroom). If you continue beyond that I would say start a new encounter. Maybe a few days or a week later. Maybe someplace interesting.

The first reviewer simply meant that there were too many "..." and "-" constructs used. Personally I disagree, I hadn't noticed before I saw the comment.

This just keeps getting better and better.