by DS7
You told an interesting story well. The ending was a little unbelievable, but that's your interpretation! 4*!!!
"Was this a new dimension in our lives, and was I ready for it?" WTF?? And doing nothing while watching his unprotected wife get fucked????? Your writing doesn't match his actions
This will be yet another wimpy cuck and his selfish slut series. No real man just stands there like a moron. He takes action and throws the whore to the curb
And I shot the cheating bitch between the eyes and left to find Mike.
He doesn't do anything????? REALLY?????? What's with you wimp-ass writers???
Also....unfinished!
Marie just left room.
I will buy husband standing there in shock BUT NOT MARIE!!!
I was searching for stories about adult theater adventures and happened across this story because of the title. I quickly realized it wasn't what I was looking for, but couldn't stop reading it due to it being so well written. I read several of the other comments and recognize I'm in the minority, but I'm not one to let other determine what I like. I enjoyed the story a lot and give it 5 stars. Unlike many of the other readers, I could believe and understand his reaction to his beloved wife's actions. I doubt mine would have been the same, but love without limits means there are no limits to your love and you accept whatever makes the person you love happy. I suspect many of the commenters have never experienced that level of love. Thankfully I have.
What an asshole he she it...IT is. It should be put down and the Government should pay to do it. No one should have top put up with IT's bullshit. gave this a 5 to help your score.
First women don't talk that way when describing sex. Two the room was dark so he could not see as well as described. Since it could not be, I gave it a 2.
Shoe's such a pathetic wimp that his slut wife is all over the country side giving it away free because no-one will pay. Then Shoe can suck & lick her clean after every episode. What a loser!
The marriage is trash. She was barebacked and used publically. Even with testing it will be a year before they can have sex and her she is probably fertile and bred. You dont keep trash, you throw it away.
Well at least he did not become sexually excited by the scene (I think.....) It really depends on what shows up in the following chapters. So far it is not what I like to read
but I recognize that it is well written and structured so I gave it a 5 where it counts.
for me to understand how the husband could have stood and watched Mike fuck Jill, unable to move or speak or do anything to stop them. Yes, I can imagine being shocked at first--but not frozen for several minutes! For me that's the big problem, I can't suspend my disbelief enough to swallow that one. Thanks, ohio
Now that you have set the scene you need to follow through. The story definitely has potential but it will all depend on where you go from here. I will be watching for future chapters.
loving a slut betray her husband, her marriage, and herself. Not much here. If she had been upfront and agreed with the husband to swing that is one thing, this woman violated everything in their marriage. She is plain trash.
The wife willingly took another man's cock bareback into her pussy and fucked him and he came in her. There really is nothing else to discuss or say, the marriage is over. Only two things need to be done now. Her medical testing for a year and the divorce.
Nice beggining, but don´t make him a wimp!
kick her ass and let the life go on!
i'm going to reserve rating until the next chapter. I like it si far. Don't let the asshats who are insecure disuade you, write what YOU want to say. (you get a 4 so far)
this might be, I stress, might be a good beginning. Like another commentator stated, if he kicks her slutty cheating ass to the curb, then I could live w/ this.
But after the shock was over he at least should have told his wife,Jill to find some place to stay that night. That she wasn't welcome in his house. That Mike would be getting served with alienation of affection suit, and she would be served with the divorce papers as soon as he could get in to see his attorney.Jill has probably been fucking Mike for a long time, and they just got caught. I hope that you write another chapter to let us poor readers what happens. Thanks ......Rich
But after the shock was over he at least should have told his wife,Jill to find some place to stay that night. That she wasn't welcome in his house. That Mike would be getting served with alienation of affection suit, and she would be served with the divorce papers as soon as he could get in to see his attorney.Jill has probably been fucking Mike for a long time, and they just got caught. I hope that you write another chapter to let us poor readers what happens. Thanks ......Rich
Good story nice cliff hanger hope the follow up is as good. She’s got to feel some of his pain though or the other guy gets stuffed by the wife.
Unless you plan on having him kick the cheating whore as far as he can, there is no ending. After seeing what he did first hand and searching his feelings, there is no future with this piece of shit motherfucking dirt bag douchebag cunt. I would personally like to see him brutally murder her and get away with it.
Cant wait for the Follow-up to See how he handles it and How she Explains Herself. Obviously she is More open then he is. and Respects him less then a Wife should. I would Kick Mikes Ass or Sue him for Alienation. Just to Embarass her and him.
Then why didn't you indicate that with a chapter number? Do you have that much contempt for the readers or are you just a moron?
in place and his dick got all three inches hard. Man if this isn't pushing a plot just to see the wife fucked...You also let it end to soon. I don't think you should write any more. You probably came too soon before you finished it...PUKE
really cold charachters. a story allready started a little crisis and the other two just went on and did something unthikably for the situation. hopeless story not erotic.
this was obviously not her first time as she seemed quite comfortable sharing herself with another man. Hubby's no better though, as he wanted to have an affair as well. Neither one of them are worth marrying.
I think most of the posters have it correct, wimp husband does nothing, cheaters lead to life of wild debauchery for all but the wimp husband. Groan.
Also while I am ranting, whats with all the multi parts with purported cliffhanger endings? Has this place become the modern equivalent to Sat afternoon matinees and serials?
I guess the authors are now sitting at computers pulling their dicks and feeling sorry for themselves. Looking for fans and followers to fill their miserable existence by writing multi part epics...cheap thrills.
no worries. more to come. i am thinking of running the story from the multiple parties points of view. Jill's is submitted. ch. 3 will be the continuation from the point jill walks in, and, blended in will be mike and marie and bill and nancy stories as well, revloving around this night. still working on it. sorry to rate it myself. had to rate so I picked the middle, to get the comment posted.
And welcome to Loving Wives - perhaps the most challenging and critical section of Literotica.<P>
The story flows well enough but the point where you ended it is very unsatisfying. What does he do? Is this for the reader to decide? Is this a part one of multipart story? If so why not let us know? Why would a wife do this at the 7 year point of a marriage? Why would she doe this when the odds of discovery are so high? A one off event or the continuation of a longer affair?<P>
Lots and lots of questions. Thanks for sharing.
Just another wimp husband. Don't worry he won't do or say anything. the marriage will continue and wife will 'occasionally' step out on he rloving and faithful husband.
I will have to agree with one of the other comments, if this is part one, it's a good beginning. If this is all, it's incomplete with no ending. If a part 2 is coming it is your choice on how the characters react. Write it your way and don't let the anonymous Andys and hate Nazis get to you. Thanks for your effort.
End of my marriage, I guess you can take it where you want, good luck.
This has the potential to be a great story. I'd really like to see where the author takes it. -- Jim
If this is the complete story, then it is terrible. If there is more, and the husband kicks Jill out on the street so hard that her ass burns as she slides across the concrete, then it might be redeemable. Maybe!
but I have a feeling that this will be just another wimpy husband song and dance story. It should be a real knock out of a fight with her leaving and him getting a divorce because she fucked the other quy.