All Comments on 'The Things You Do For Family! Ch. 01'

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 14 years ago
near death

This story is near death for reading with the over and frequent use of these constructs: "word -- word", and "word...word" a well done story doesn't need nor uses any.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 14 years ago
What About Gramps

Good start. Don't leave grandpa out. He is lonely and needs more than money heh heh.

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