All Comments on 'The Train Ride'

...the rest was very exciting and well done. Kudos on your first story!

The accents were sometimes hard to read, and just came off as hokey. Otherwise, it was a good story with only a few typos.

I would have rated your story higher if you hasn't written the accent, which made it hard to read and distracting. Otherwise, great job!

I also had trouble with an accent that would have given Henry Higgins fits. South American, Mediterranean, Middle Eastern? Who knows? At least there was an accent. The story would not have worked without one. Thanks for a fun, first submission. Please come back.

I've edited this story a little hopefully to make it easier to read & fix some errors.

Where do I get on that train?

Great story, I'd give it 10 if I could.