All Comments on 'The Vampire'

maybe make another part to this

I would really like for you to continue with this chapter.. Im curious as to what might happen next. I thought you did a good job writing this story. My only suggestion is to perhaps put what the vampire says in Italics, so that the reader knows he is speaking right away.... just makes things a bit simpler :)

This story went from "Stone" cold to really hot quickly. It also seemed an original idea, or at least one I hadn't read before. If you do write a second chapter as has been requested, I'd read it.

Would have been better if it had been edited. But I enjoyed it!