All Comments on 'Tormented by the Babysitter Ch. 01'

You need to separate the conversations to make it easier to read.

Do this throughout your story and it will be an easier read.

Wow, loved the story. Is thier more? would like to see you focus more on her humiliation, is it her telling about her big clit, and loose cunt or is that you writing? It would seam that most women are terrified about being loose, perhaps she would be offended but would love more on it.

....erotic,nor does it have the tinge of plausibility necessary for a tale to be erotic.(Unless you have the imagination of a two year old.)After 20 years of marriage Karen could tell her husband what she'd been doing,which wasn't adultery (at that point) even if she was too stupid to tell the little blackmailer what kind of trouble she was in simply for stealing her email.And this is the problem with blackmail stories on this site.They are rarely set up such that they might have a hint of possible success and usually the supposed consequences are far less than the consequences of extortion.(As in this case) You have a great plot outline here but it needs more effort-pistolpackinpete

Sizzling Hot story !

I hope there will be more humiliation for Karen

I liked this story and I hope that your friend Karen has some more good ideas to add for the next chapter. I admit that I agree with some of the other comments about the layout making it a little more difficult to read and also the fact that the hold that Nikki has over Karen in the story was not very strong so that her instant caputulation to blackmail was not very believable.

I could not write a better story though so I do not want to criticise too much as I still want to see what happens in the next chapter.

I agree with the other commenters - the leverage could be better. Maybe instead of just threatening to tell the husband, the babysitter could also threaten to tell her friends and extended family, as well? Threaten to post the pictures online?

Still, I like where this is going. More please!

Great start of a story and WOW..

Please continue with future chapters.... Thanks

Very nice Sizzling story ! I hope there will be more humiliation for Karen, can hardly wait to see her stuffed full of cock.

Fuck that was hot! you should have her fucked hard! You could get her hubby in on the action! Show him how much 'fun' she can be

Can't wait to read the rest......

What a great story, I was close to cumming myself just reading it.....think I'll get off shortly after starting on part 2!!

The begning was awsome really Love'd how the story went ,felt a connection bitween them and a Little real life feeling but as the new charec

tures showed up it got Boring flete like the writer was running out