All Comments on 'Touring Together'

I like your style, Beastie. One tiny niggle: palette is what a painter uses, palate is for tasting.

You have a wonderful descriptive way of writing, from the details of their surroundings to the internal voice of the narrator sharing his thoughts and desires. And I loved how you described her orgasm:<br><br>

<i>And with that she was carried away on a wave of sensation, flooding out from her crotch and searing up through her belly and down her limbs, making her muscles tense and her body shake. She opened her mouth wide and gasped over and over, her eyes looking up at the sky but seeing nothing.

<br>Then like ripples dying in a pool, the waves of pleasure eased and faded, and she came back to the here and now.</i><br><br>

Thoroughly descriptive and spot on!

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I think this was my favorite line:<br>

<i>she was a nubile willing woman, to be fucked with every ounce of strength in him, nailed against the ground and hammered until she begged for mercy or he sprayed his seed into her</i><br><br>

rawwwwwwwwwwwwwwwr!

Tender and titillating by turns, I thoroughly enjoyed this one, Beastie.

Your characters live! And you took us to France where we all enjoyed it!

True erotic fiction. Brill

Really enjoyed this, EB. Thanks so much for sharing your writing talents with us. *hugs*

Really enjoyed reading this story. Good luck in the contest.

So what's the Scot's name for 'sweet'? Because maybe the handsome beastie is also a sweet beastie, for he sure spins a romantic story. :) Good luck with the contest, Beastie.

Both of you will get the most horrible chafing sores, cycling that far in underpants! Commando is so much more comfortable. Very sweet story, though; congratulations.

i loved your story. it Almost makes me want to take up cycling. :)