by BisexualWife9304
great story! it was quick, to the point and sexy all at the same time.....great job!
too short. just didn't grab my attention. a story should have some build to it. Make the person want more by dragging the story out a little further before the sex.
the orgasms are much better.
The story has good initiave, but like the other comment, it was a little short, it doesn't have to be 20 -pages long, but drag it out a little more. Leave the reader wanting so much more. But keep on writing though, you do have a way with words. And get more creative, make it a little more exciting.