All Comments on 'Twins alone, late night'

Very hot, loved it

Absolutely loved that, so descriptive

Stick this crap up the writer ass

HAHAHAHAHAHA!! Idiot.

Cute story. I liked it!

I can't wait for more

I love the slow build. Keep writing. This story was very good.

Loved it, the teasing, the slow build up and the hot sex they enjoyed together... but next time his cum belongs inside her...

Great way to build your story. You had me believing they were going to stop at every turn, and they kept raising the ante. Keep writing, you got it.

I like the story and the dialogue. Good start, would like to see more.

Thanks!

I wish I was the sister

This was great , would love to see more

continue this please.

All the unbelievable slow escalation of dares between the twins, taken outdoors onto the cold yard or deck then the moment of actual penetration is told in such an underwhelming way. WTF?

Sorry, but this was barely worth calling stroke fodder as it had terrible pacing with all the awkward banter back and forth between them. Stopped caring after the second lame "dare" and just skimmed along to see if it got hotter. It didn't. Even an imaginary scene needs to make a bit of sense to accomplish anything.

I think this is a great piece of writing. Having known twins in the past whose relationship evolved very close to this makes a very hot and believable story.

I also find it interesting that almost every negative comment I've seen on this site are from "Anonymous". Who ever this person is needs to learn to quit hiding like a baby back bitch. If you got something to says let it be known who you are, good or bad.

Anyway keep writing please you do some good work. 4/5 stars. Sorry for the "anon" comment, but Lit isn't letting me log in for some reason.

(^_^)

Blessed Be

TargeT_PsY

I loved both of your stories can't wait to read a second chapter to them both

I've read many stories here but I have NEVER commented on one....VOTED...yes..but never a comment until now. That was HOT! I really do believe that twins have a special bond that other brothers & sisters do not...that a twins relationship has more potential to reach stratospheric levels of heat...lust ...and raw sexuality. Probably one of my favorite fantasies...having a twin sister. OMG I loved this story! AWESOME!

Hope they go again. Wonder if either were virgins? Might make a nice morning after story

This is so erotic, the descriptions, the dirty talk, the build up...

us a strong pair of characters with just the right combination of silliness, innocence, and intimacy to make them and the story believable, a pacing and intimacy that makes the siblings' increasing sexual play engrossing and realistic, and an ending that provides the reader with enough to entice and wonder about the future of these characters.

what an erotic innocent believable story. BTW- I have three sisters!!

The anticipation was sexy and well paced. Loved it! You have talent.

That you only have 2 stories here. Both are highly erotic and super hot. I would love to read more.

That was the hottest story I’ve read on this site. 5 stars for sure

I really enjoyed your little Story, and like many of your reviewers am sorry you didn't continue it for at least another chapter, or longer. Where it ended, the sister really needed to get herself eaten out, so she will know what she has been missing, and can help lead her brother down that long road of bliss. And I'm sorry you didn't continue your second story either. Thanx for the Read!

So fucking Hot

We need another story

Or a continuing chapter

Thanks for a good read

Wow that was a really hot story!!!!!!

I wish you hadn't stopped writing!!!

Just as good as when I first read this almost 5 years ago.

So erotic and sexy. I enjoyed how loving and tender they were to each other.

Wish you added another chapter.

Wonderful

You have a knack. Why did you stop? I always wonder if something happened to authors with one or two good stories, then nothing. Accident? Illness? Covid?

You have a gift my friend. Excellent story.

I really don't understand what all the great comments are about. You make the conversations between these twin's sound so childish like they are 12 or 13 years old not 18 or so like they are. And you missed out on describing the best part when they entered into intercourse like when his cock found it's way into his sister. Also another thing you missed was he should have cum in his sisters pussy you know like he was so out of control and lost in bliss he just blew all of his huge load into her. Just my thoughts

Over use of "HAHA", "Big Brother", & "Little Sister". And as Anonymous said You make the conversations between these twin's sound so childish like they are 12 or 13 years old.

I read this story some time ago, but for some reason I didn't leave a comment on it. I have to wholeheartedly agree with the comments posted by GrandEagle53. The overuse of "Haha" drove me up the wall. Most authors will write something like "I answered Kassie with a hearty laugh." or "We both enjoyed a good chuckle thinking about that day." Generally speaking, if an author actually writes "Haha" into the character's dialog, it's intended to be read as sarcasm or some other emotional response.

Also, the dialog comes across as fake or contrived if you have one character addressing the other by their title instead of a nickname. Brothers and Sisters having a nickname for each other is pretty commonplace and therefore expected in dialog. But they never would say anything like "Come here Brother and give me a hug!" We already know that it's a Brother/Sister incest tale, but if you're trying to stir up the prurient interests of your readers, then put the brother and sister words in the narrative where the correctly belong. 4/5

I gave this 4 stars. It was hot & fun but something was missing. It was still a good story.

Bill S.

Great.

Bill S.

This was a great story. I’d like to see a part two of both the stories you currently have posted.. they were both super hot. I really enjoyed them both.. I sure wish I had a sister like that.