All Comments on 'Uncertain Desires Ch. 04'

I would like to apologize in advance for if the dialogue is a little hard to read....I have know idea what happend to it but if u could try and make the best of it ... greatly appreciated.

Again sorry for those who have trouble reading it.<3

Not too bad.

yepp...please carry on...i like the story.

I like where this is going; better pace and a longer chapter. However you may want to improve on your grammar... But don't stop, the story is very interesting!

However, it gets a bit stilted with the constant switching POVs. Hopefully you'll work it out.

Oh yeah I will definitely be waiting for the next chapter.this story is gonna be jam packed with amazingness

I feel the meeting at the door was slow as you repeated information going between the characters. When you back up a scene to see it from another's perspective, it's to add pertinent information. You did this well with the phone call to Jeff, but describing that the girls had just exercised from both alpha's points of view was repetitive and unnecessary.