All Comments on 'Uncle's Unfinished Business Ch. 01'

EDITOR!!!!

Two things stand out at me rather glaringly.

1) There aren't quotation marks. It's kinda jarring and takes away from the premise when you have to figure out if something is an action or words being spoken.

2) You tell us what happen, not show us. She asked ___. I told her ___. Actually have them say the words, not just say "I told her the answer" type of situation.

such poor grammar and construction that it is incoherent. borderline terrible.