All Comments on 'Veronica's Thong'

An amazingly lucid story for a first attempt. If I might suggest, try writing the story first and then go back and inject the sex where needed. From here it looks like the two get in each other's way and they are both the worst for wear. Oh, spell checking is nice, but reading the story through will turn up the words that are wrong - expose instead of exposed, there vs their, etc. Keep writing and a lot of the nit picky things will take care of themselves.

Tom