All Comments on 'Wagons Ho'

You have written the best story on this site, bar none. You have a great talent sir. I hope your talents extend to further chapters in this saga. Thank You. Ronnie W.

I quite enjoyed the story. Especially the the character development. Would have liked to be teased a little more(found the sex sections a little bit anticlimactic.) Please post more like it.

I thought the story was very good and there are lots of follow on possibilities. The only negative was the old-fashioned language which was not accurate (for instance thee was used often where thou should have been). I found that this sometimes distracted me from the story which was a pity.

I loved yur story.I wish I was her. Hot and sexey. I do hope you write more of their adventure, keep up the good work..Linda

and erotic, I enjoyed reading this tale of two travelers who find a way to enjoy the boredom of travel. Please continue with another chapter of erotic fun.

What a great story. Those of us over sixty still have love in our hearts and enjoy reading about others our age. CB

Please continue this story.

Boyd

it was a great story but many irrelivant details which frustrate the reader who needs more Sex.cut the crap n come to the point coz to b honest,no one use formalities in this extend wen its matter of sex.

A wonderful story very well written. A very tender tale of patience and respect. A refreshing break from the normal boom bam sex tales.

Please keep it going as they travel on their journey to a new land and new life.

This is a good read. The sex was fine but it would have been just as enjoyable without it. Looking for the next chapter.

What a wonderful story idea, I love history and have often wondered how single women came west. This story gives a great idea about how that might have happened and the sexual aspects were very romantic and exciting too. Thank you, keep this story going.

A gentle, loving story. There are times when fast and furious is good...yet there are times when it's just as wonderful soft and slow. I enjoyed the build up of their confidence and opening up to one another. More chapters in the future would be great. Please continue to tell their adventures both non-sexual and sexual!

Not all want a steady diet of wham, bam, thank you mam, that Pakistan champions.

There may be a time and place for that ...

but .........

this was not the place.

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Congratulations of a fine piece of writing, and for allowing both characters to proceed at their own pace.

Future episodes will be most welcomed, as one responder said, for their nonsexual AND sexual adventures.

Thanks very much for an enjoyable read.

Well done!

Superb story, first class! How nice to see someone write a story - not a collection of porno situations! Pakistan has totally missed the class and tastefulness of this lovely piece of writing. Well done! (psst Thee may like to brush up on the grammar of the Quaker speech ;o) )

This was an OK story, but it was difficult to stay inside it because of you appear to be quite confused about when to use thou, thee and thy. There were moments when I wondered whether you weren't recording a particular dialect that confuses these much as most modern American English speakers confuse lay, lie, laying, lying, and laid. But every now and again you use thee, thou or thou correctly, which puts paid to my dialect explanation.

Another disconnect is the use of modern terminology for aspects of the sex you describe. I strongly doubt that people in the early 1860s talked about 'come' or 'coming' to describe the moment of orgasm, or ejaculation. I suspect they would have used the term 'spend'... or somesuch.

This is a fine story, but I had to downrate it for inconsistent language. In 19th-century Quaker plain speech, "thee" is used for both subjects and objects, and it takes 3rd person singular agreement. So it's "thee is", not "thee are", which would sound as weird then as "he are" would today.

You often remember to use "thee", but often you fall into using "thou" (which was obsolete even in plain speech, except when speaking to God, by the end of the 18th century) or even "you". Real Quakers probably weren't 100% consistent either, but in a story this is jarring.

Write more, you'er only half way to Oregon! Wonderful story!

I'm not hung up on the thee's and thou's, more enjoyed the Quaker peacefulness of the story. Pleasantly refreshing.

John

Although some have previously remarked on the inconsistencies and also the good, "pleasant" calm nature of the story, I can only congratulate and wait for part 2.

John

I am a huge fan of period pieces and the wild west is one of my favorites. You did a great job of capturing the language. The tender exchanges between Clara and Jerry were very good too. I also appreciate the modesty with which they approache the lovemaking. Very well done. Thank you for your submission.

No one was even aware of the existence of the g-spot until Ernst Gräfenberg published some studies regarding the G-spot in the 1940s and it didn't reach the current vernacular until the term G-spot was coined around the early 1980s by another writer. I also doubt that the ordinary everyday man knew about the clitoris (at least its name) during that period. But I did enjoy the story and, as someone else said, "They're only halfway to Oregon!"

I'm really enjoying this story, especially the word plays.

This is a good idea for a story but the language was all wrong and I had to quit reading halfway through. Your Quaker vernacular was wrong and they would not have used words like cum or coming or orgasm or clitoris. Definitely not G-spot (one may have found it but it wouldn't have had a name).

of mutual discovery.

Thee hath written a story worth Five Stars!

LMAO really? A 1800's man knows Clit, and G Spot, that's halirous!

Five Stars!

It is a 20th-century term, not known in the 19 century.

But, home made soap was most always lye soap. To most people lye soap was so caustic it could take the hide off a hog and it could burn a human if too much lye was used in the soap making process. To those who don’t know lye is caustic soda chemically known as Sodium Hydroxide. I sure as hell wouldn't want to bathe with lye soap. MM

"Thee" is the object form; "thou" the subject. A Quaker world know this, as would everyone else in the nineteenth century with any education.