All Comments on 'Wanting the Girl'

make sense or dont post. im sure you had a personal meaning but i doubt anyone else can get it...

You write well, but make sure you're posting in the right place, alright? This just sounds like a private story that only you'd understand. Think of your readers, and if they would understand what you're writing about.

This story is too vague, especially the first part. And there is no plot, really. Its just the thoughts of some guy who likes Jenny. Random musings that lead to nowhere. Make something happen, for godssake!

I didn't understand this one.