by Mr Story Teller
thxs for the 1st 3 chapters they were soooo hot cant wait for the rest hopefully soon
OK YOU HAVE A GOOD PLOT GOING BUT CHAPTER 3 WAS TOO SHORT! SO WHEN YOU WRITE CHAPTER 4 REMEMBER THIS, AS NO ONE NEEDS A CLIFFHANGER AT THIS POINT. JUST WRITE THE STORY, AND SEE WHERE IT LEADS. IF YOU CHAPTERS ARE SHORT PEOPLE MAY WAIT UNTIL YOU HAVE MORE THAN ONE CHAPTER TO READ.