All Comments on 'Welcome Home Ch. 01'

Hey, who is Michelle?

You need to be more carful when copying text from another's story... I was approaching the "climax" of this story when all of a sudden this appeared-- "The white sticky liquid landed on Michelle's neck then trickled down a breast." Since the character in question was named Alana, I thought what the fuck? Though the story was sufficiently hot, this ruined it for me. I can only rate you a 50 because of this now.

M.

Thank you both for your comments. I couldn’t believe I did that when I reread my story. Originally I was using Michelle then changed to Alana. Very embarrassing and I apologize for such a stupid mistake. I was anxious this being my first post and didn’t pay close enough attention. I’m going over my next part much more carefully. Thank you again for the constructive criticism.

SS6