All Comments on 'What Are You Saying?'

When she wears the shoes again

Excellent job with dialogue. It was very real- interruptions, incomplete thoughts, completing each other's thoughts... . The mixed emotions of both ladies come through clearly. The thrill of danger without the evening news realities.

is all dialogue, and it is done very well. It is a little too sparse, though, and needs filling out with more descriptive prose if it is too rate a 5. There are too many unanswered questions about the two (three) characters. This is more like an outline. Great concept, though. A lot of information was conveyed in very few words, unlike so much of what gets posted here.

"Oh, Lord." is used to the point where it almost becomes a catch phrase.

I like the way the story develops. Very well-written. The shoes are a nice way to set up the story. I'm looking forward to sequels.

I like the way you developed the story line with very plausible dialogue.

Please do write a few sequel chapters and thanks for sharing your fantasy

Regards

P