Wonderland Ch. 06

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Thatcher felt like an idiot.

He had the information he needed; he knew who the Gargoyle was, he knew what role Tempest had played, he knew what the tracking party was up to, and he had his lead. Instead of cutting his losses quick, he had just made another reason to stay.

WHY?!

Revving the clutch, he tore down the winding hill road into Wonderland, his Kawasaki hugging the curves. A flash of thighs clad in tiny baby pink exercise shorts flickered through his mind and Thatcher swore, swerving hard on the road until his bike skid to a stop.

Taking off his helmet he left his motor running, his breathing ragged as he half-walked, half-jogged towards the forest and away from the road, trying to clear his head.

This wasn't what he needed. Not now, not when he was so fucking close. A distraction wasn't going to serve him well and he had his experience with humans. It hadn't ended up well, to say the least.

Tempest was in truth, a secondhand deal. She had been used for food and protection and then tossed. She ached from an incomplete bond with a Gargoyle who Thatcher couldn't make any accurate assumptions about, not anymore. Tze'sic had been legendary for his heroics and his political maneuvers, but Casanova he was not. His interest in Tempest surprised the hell out of Thatcher, but everything about this entire situation did.

He should drive back to his camp, pack up, and head towards Queensland to meet up with the others. If he got there in time, he could stop this bloody war. What he knew could change...everything.

Thatcher came to a small clearing and closed his eyes, planting his feet firmly. Taking a deep breath, he could smell...Tempest.

Thatcher couldn't help it.

He laughed. He laughed long and hard until he fell to his knees and tears streamed down his face. He laughed until he couldn't breathe. Opening his eyes now, he clutched at the fallen leaves and grass, digging his fingers into the soft dirt, trying to regain a bit of control.

When he could stand again, the decision was made.

There was no turning back after this. He would finish what he started, what he had spent a lifetime planning. No more distractions, no more interruptions. The human world would not be safe for much longer, the Raspan King would see to that. And in turn, Thatcher would have to see to human's safety. It was his duty.

Thatcher turned back to the road, his faith renewed and his purpose redefined. He lifted the collar of his jacket to his nose, a clean, flowery scent filling up his lungs as he breathed in. A smile crossed his lips as he left the forest and fixated his dark eyes on the lone white house perched on top of its hill, a single window lit up at the very top of the house.

Well, Thatcher thought to himself as he swung his leg over his bike and kicked up the stand, not all distractions were unwelcome. At least, not where Tempest was concerned.

Thatcher revved his bike to life, overpowering the soft growls from the forest. He took off towards the city park, too distracted by his change of plans to notice the hulking black forms that followed him, their black pelts glistening like oil under the pale moon as they streaked through the trees. Black eyes glowed red when Thatcher turned into the forest, leading them far away from the city.

As though synchronized, the Raspan's dove into the earth, their slick fur easing the way through crumbled rock, tree roots, and compacted earth; tunneling deeper and deeper until a maze of tunnels began to form. The pack spread out, spanning their new kingdom far beneath the rumbling cacophony of the city above them, each Raspan claiming a section of tunnels for their own.

Later, when their work was done, the feast would begin.

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I'd like to thank my editor, mikothebaby, for going over the chapter for me. I made a few changes before the initial submission, so any faults you see are more than likely my own. And like I said earlier, in this story, everything is related. Don't forget that.

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 7 years ago
Hush, Hush

Some parts of the story sound awfully similar to excerpts from Hush, Hush. Patch? Thatch? Hmmm. I love the story, it's creative and interesting and well written. Just be careful; there are many shades of plagiarism.

albinobarbiealbinobarbieabout 12 years ago
to the person who wrote the 'true colors' comment.

Look, sweetheart, this is her story. She didn't need to write it. She has schoolwork to tend to.

I, for one, think that she is brilliant. She keeps her reader's interested.

There is a fine line between criticism and respect. The comment that she was referring to was selfish. Criticism is suppose to help the author and the story. The reader didn't approve of the Thatcher + Tempest, so she/he asked for a rewrite.

Which was so rude, I couldn't help but get irritated as well.

LillithArchivist could have just ditched the story, because she does have a life outside of literotica, but she didn't.

I just think that you should be grateful.

chavivelachavivelaabout 12 years ago
great job!

you're a rare jewel in stack of rhinestones!

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
I don't knooowww!

Ah... When I first started reading this, I really like Talon and Tempest together.... But now as the story progresses, I find myself liking Thatcher a hell of a lot more than Talon... I don't know who I like better! Seriously good job on this! I'm off to go read the next chapter! :D

mochadesiremochadesirealmost 13 years ago
Love, love, love

If I'm honest, I love the arrival of Thatcher. He adds an unexpected dimension to an already brilliant and original story. So all I can say is screw all of the haters, like you said, it's your story. I would have liked for Tempest to be a bit more resisting of Thatcher's charms, after all, I was just beginning to like Talon's character, but hey, it makes for an interesting twist. Keep it up!

mochadesire

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
Author's Note

The fact that readers want things for the character o plot often means they're becoming emotionally invested in the story. You should take it as the compliment it is.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
true colors

"My story is going to play out the way *I* want it." Then why ask for comments if you can't handle a little criticism??? Only to have your ego stroked? Your comment is arrogant and reflective of how you feel about your readers.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
More

You are such a good writer!!! I love your story and can not wait for more!!!

Sirens_CrySirens_Cryalmost 13 years ago
ACK!

I need more! Immediately!!! I just read the story so far and LOVE it. I do sometimes have some moments of confusion with the tenses switching around but its not enough to deter me from the wonderful story. Fix Talon and Tempest!!!!...or at least post more so we'll know how its all relevant lol. Great work!

mikothebabymikothebabyalmost 13 years ago
those not willing to wait

will just not get the whole story - this is the reason for series - a series does not mean instant gratification. It means that both we and the author are invested in future chapters to see how things play out. I, for one, do not want stories that answer all questions in the first chapter or two. I want to be challenged to think about what might happen and then have the author take me into left field that I never even thought of. If you want vanilla stories go to the other genres here on Lit that are all about meet someone, fuck them, orgasm - the end. Not what this chick is looking for .... just saying - lmao

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