All Comments on 'Year-The Future (Then)'

M'dear,,, review homonyms - eg, through; threw; (at least some of your mistakes are consistent!) and sentence structure. Judicious use of the comma, etc ... think about the rhythms of speech, and how people do have their little pauses for effect or comprehension; use those. Writing is fun; good writing includes more work from you and less work from the reader, which makes for: more fun!

There was one bit where you had a reunion taking place with a run towards each other taking no time and over two miles. Best solution is to buddy-up with someone else to edit on turn-about basis; it's hardest to edit your own work because you read what you expect, not what is; and you know what you meant, not what difficulties a reader will have in untangling.

And keep writing!!

Yrs (Hidieon - Hidieon@yahoo.com)

This need to be re-posted that last part is listed under series as the first.

Kills a story when you read the ending first