by steve w
The whole loving pain and forced fisting was hot. I can see a lot of ways to continue the story from there. The sh*t licking turned me off.
Its a good story but i think its in the wrong category to be honest. It needs more orders and bondage and sub dom control to be bdsm where as this touches it a little but is more about anal x
I can honestly say I liked it. I'm into "forced" sex and anal play, so it's right up my street.
This is actually quite good, but the focus on liking her own shit was gross, and the idea of a gaping asshole was also disturbing - but I guess that's the point of the BDSM
i adore your style of writing. I believe your intro was very strong honestly, it sets everything up perfectly. It was a bit gross but that's the point, yes? That was 10/10 thank you, I look forward to reading the second part
You're intro was really bad. The rest was ok though the shift licking was really gross.
I liked it but the intro is bad, if you want to get people into reading this fix the intro, make them read this, tell something unusual and fucking sexy. Anyway I rate it 4 Good luck
that older brother and soon-to-be-ex girlfriend found each other. No loss for him there. Fine for folks who want all the nastiness they can get, but just messes up people who don't need that if they try to make a go of it with that type. Every level of whatever needs to finds its own kind. Me - my eyeballs need bleach.
The story was pussy dripping good, but the writing itself could have used an editor
Kik me if you wanna stretch my cunt and virgin ass. I'm so wet. nickolexoxolol
well written, imaginative. add more of "help, what is he about to do now?" so she starts to fear what he will do.
i honestly am in love with this story. i found it months ago and i keep coming back to read it. i submit like that, always.
this is definitely one of my favorite stories, i read it over and over! keep on writing!
love submissive painslut stories, and this one is pretty good. MORE, please!
You caught the exact feelings I had when I was first ass-raped. I was 16 at the time and I'm 20 years older now but it's still my favorite way to be fucked.
I remember the very first few times I was ass raped ... it hurt so but I loved it at the same time. Nothing better than a fist in one's ass at the end of a long day. Writhing, groaning, crying and never wanting it to stop. GREAT STORY!
A story I could get into! It's so nice having a young female in the sub role, not some 30-year-old lady. I would love to be treated like this <3
Personally I'm not really into things quite this hardcore, but you still made it sexy. You keep it hot and sexual while still being a good writer--great job & keep it coming! :)
Yr idea was amazing. You are really on the right lines making this such hardcore stuff, much tougher than all the other stories I have read.
I think it was have been fantastic if you had introduced a dildo for a vaginal fuck that was so enormous it would only go in when she orgasmed, and after when she shrank again, it was so huge it was splitting her.
Another idea, he could have dried her by covering a dildo with a towel and mopping up all her juices so it really hurt to go in!
I thought he could also have put a clit ring in or something, rather than pulling her hair which seemed a bit unsexy to me!
I love your writing, keep on doing it! Thanks, really enjoyed it.
The best story i have ever read...and I thought my husband and i were the only ones who did this kind of shit ;)
Wonderful story! It's _incredibly_ hot *drools*! Keep up the great work, I look forward to reading more of your stories.
so hot! but i agree with a previous comment. shitter, shithole, etc.? all major turnoffs. stick to ass.
had to use a fuckinh dildo bigger than the one you were talking about to fulfill my needs after this story my pussy is so sore and wet and I'm still megga horny I wish someone would fuck me like that ;) x
Really good. Just not a fan of the word 'shitter'. Sorry! Story turned me on - that word turned me off.
Love, love, love this story. It doesn't leave much room for future "chapters", but then it doesn't need to. The intensity is awesome and well...it's written pretty damn well. Thanks so much.
Love it, this is exactly what i have been looking for. please write more like this!. got me so hot..
Amazing humiliation - well played out. The submissive whore in her came to the fore. Good job.
it was good and hot. don't cuss so much, use a more intelligent vocabulary
well im ready as hell for part 2, i like the short sentences, no long drawn out descriptions, good work
i may be the only one but i didnt like it much, too much cussing and too many question marks..i mean i readhalf but didn't even get wet or anything
HE PRETTY MUCH DID THE SAME THING TO ME...I FUCKIN LOVED IT! MMMMMM CAME SOOO MUCH! GRET STORY, WOULD LEAVE TO SEE MORE CUM (I MEAN COME) FROM YOU!
Like the other ladies said, where can I find myself a man like that? Yummy!
The Raw makes it! At last...a story similiar to my own private ones.
i came so fucking hard....wonderful wonderful... i need a man like that
absoulutely wonderful wish i could find me a man to abuse me like that! dont stop!!!!!!!!
The right track indeed...