All Comments on 'Zara and the Alpha Ch. 02'

Thank you so much for this chapter, i am enjoying your writings and can't wait til the next.

you could slow down a lil bit and not introduce so many distractions

I love it when a future madam alpha that doesn't know it, shouts at the main men in the pack and when they get like little school boys it's so funny. Had me roflmao x

it started out very promising , but it just jumps from place to place, from issue to issue.. there isnt any background on the characters and keeping names and people straight is just hard work.

get an editor. At least use spellcheck and proofread carefully.

You have a great premise for a story line, but the fact that your spelling and grammar are horrendous takes a lot from the story. Believe it or not verb tenses are critical, as well as proper pronouns. If you re read your story you'll find that cal ( who she know is an alpha but doesnt know he's we're?) used 3 hands to pleasure Zara in the car. Background information on your characters would also be appreciated

WOW,these chapters have just flown by and i am getting dizzy trying to keep track of everything.Its a good plot,but you dont have to do it all in 3 chapters,lol.Give some background,stretch it out a bit,Even writing this i am forgetting names and where they belong,Please,give us more detail,and i think it will be a great story!

Love your story. Don't listen (too much) to all the critics. As an author on lit myself I had my share of flames and it sometimes discouraged me from writing more.

Your stories are great. If you try to fix too much you could lose your flow and get stuck. The mistakes can be corrected but a good storyline is hard to come by, so keep it going.

Ok, I really enjoy your stories, just curious as to when you will be brining more chapters out? It's been a while since the last one.

I caaaannnt wait til youre done with both series of the sisters!!!!!!!