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Beware the Babysitter

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous03/14/09

Come on

Ridiculous

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by Anonymous03/14/09

I loved It !!!

Ridiculous or what but it’s a fucking awesome story you’ve got there mate! Write more please.

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by Anonymous03/14/09

The lottery...

Is a great short story by Shirley Jackson.It does however,last longer than a plot idea.Keep trying? Maybe? Or not.Pistolpackinpete

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by Anonymous03/14/09

Not a great story, but...

Meh. I came.

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by don8765403/15/09

Very erotic, and even natural!

Babysitters probably have an ultimate in mind, especially if the father of the children they are caring for is any kind of attractive. Mothers belong with their children, regardless of their goal in life. If a woman or girl gets pregnant, the good Lord has a place for her in this life--taking care of her baby(ies), and if she wants to go out and work or whatever, and she invites someone in to watch her brood, then she is also inviting someone to enjoy what she has enjoyed, including fucking her husband and the children's Daddy. If that babysitter fucks the Daddy and makes him into a new Daddy, then our social morals should allow her a place in the home as a new Mommy, along with the old Mommy. And in every case if the new Daddy fucks yet another woman/girl and knocks her up, then that girl/woman should also be offered a place in the home. Our social morals are all fucked up in that regard, and the bitch of the matter is that we have introduced some kind of moral rule that overcomes anything written in moral writing, including what some call the Holy Bible.

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by mzzqt03/15/09

Hmmmm

I think this COULD have been a completely FANTASTIC story had you spaced it out with seduction of the dad in the story over a period of time, THEN taken over his life, ousted the wife etc. Take it back, and work more of a storyline, for its one helluva plot!

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by Anonymous03/16/09

Your plot ideas are awesome....

Your plot ideas are awesome and I have you as a favorite. You get criticized for the stories being too short, and it's fair criticism. Your topics are so good and there is not enough stories with the same niche that I'm sure people are let down because we know you could drop a crazy good story. I'm not talking 7 pages; those are a pain in the ass, and satisfaction doesn't happen until dawn. But a good two pages can get this story to perfection. Keep em' coming dude.

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by don8765407/01/09

Very erotic and even natural.....

The babysitter was already taking care of his kids, now it is about time that the babysitter have one or two of his kids, herself as well...

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by Anonymous04/25/10

This is disgusting !

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by Anonymous07/07/10

story? It's not a story

It's a premature ejaculation of a story. Srsly

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by Anonymous08/14/10

Wow

That's really wrong ... and surprisingly hot.

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by Anonymous08/22/10

far too short

good idea, but not long enough

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by Anonymous10/18/10

great start

i think you could add more.

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by hawkeye3110/19/10

Loved this story,she could babysit for me anytime

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by zchannel11/14/10

Love that bitchy nympho

Please write a sequel. This babysitter has now ruined his wife's life and is pregnant with his kid. She moves into his house, makes his wife and kids leave, and fucks and humiliates him all the time. And he'll love it. Great story.

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by richfromKY12/18/10

great read

Enjoyed it.....wish it had a sequel....very hot, just needed to be more in depth in the substance of the story.

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by vargas11105/24/11

Slightyl underdeveloped

Better without the babysitter using force on the wife, just the force of humiliation. Also better if there was some reason for her to know the seduction would work, like the wife is prudish and the husband is horny and vulnerable. (The "date" they had been on was unsuccessful, the wife still didn't want to be sexy and have more babies.)

In the sequel the babysitter could ensure the subservient wife does stay pregnant.

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by bighank10001/31/12

nice

best shot story so far loved it.
hope there is more.

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by puppetastrophe02/01/12

...wow...

this story pulled me in and wouldn't let me go... i felt awful for loving it so much (which is part of the fun)! looking forward to more like this one... bravo!

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by watchurman02/02/12

Brilliant

This story packs quite a punch for a short, sheer brilliance!
I was glued to every line, highly potent and erotic!

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by Anonymous01/02/13

YES!

Great short story. To the point, no irrelevant or boring padding. Very sexy too.

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by Anonymous07/04/13

Sexy

I loved this story it's very sexy and to the point I came when I read the ending

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by Anonymous04/27/14

Oh my!

Fuck, I came all over myself, that was fucking hot!

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by Anonymous06/19/14

More please

Love it when the wife is forced to watch.

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