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Cyntha Trains Us To Be Slaves

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by Anonymous02/17/11

Great start

I hope there's more!

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by Anonymous11/21/13

Incredible theme that will interest lots and lots of us, but...

It seemed like you started in the middle with the three of them kissing. Then there was the seemingly immediate transformation of mom and daughter into slaves. Also, there are too many syntax and spelling errors that made ones eye stop at these places and slow down the reading.

Get an editor and watch your grammar. You have an excellent story here that could, should, go for many chapters if you slow down and spell out who the players are, the exquisite seduction, and their myriad adventures of mother/daughter slaves to a transsexual.

Fix this and you have a prize winning story.........

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by sexisbeautiful08/02/14

Thank you for the nice comments and I agree..

.Sadly, I only wrote these chapters as a sort of experiment...I only wish I had the time to expand them further...I will just have to act out my wicked thoughts in reality...: ) Yum!

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