All Comments on 'Logan and Lauren Ch. 04'

My mouth is wide open in shock right now! You're so good ;-)

Loved it plz keep going

BUT U HAVE TO KEEP UP IF U TRING TO B LIKE THE OTHERS ON THIS HERE WEB SITE U FEEL ME TRY TO AT LEAST SEND OUT TWO CHAPTERS AT A TIME GET THIS STORY NO AND POPPING

Five.

yup that about sums it up for me, great chapter.

Isn't nothing worse than getting caught by a parent?! And how the hell are you suppose to hide a big-ass Navigator? LOL Awesome chapter!

Wow I gotta find out how she's gonna get out of this one. Damn her Dad is outside of the window? One good thing he must have great tented windows. Maybe she can climb in the far back...lol

hopefully she can climb in the far back. I know most Navigators have that .5 tint so it's believable to assume he can't see through the window. This chapter made me start really liking the story again. Lauren stood up for herself and so did he. Logan seems to have done a turnaround for the better, way less cocky and actually looks to be feeling her. I don't want to say 'like' until I've read more, but I wouldn't be surprised if he does genuinely like Lauren outside of that pathetic agreement. I don't like that she lost her virginity in a car, but I can see why it was done this way for story line purposes. I do wish he would've taken her to a hotel or something, he CAN afford it. Despite that, it was really hot; I especially loved her sitting on his lap at the table, so cute how he was all over her (the small flirty moments are always sexier than sex for me). Hope your next chapter is a lot longer, I feel like each chapter is just a teaser for the next instead of an actual story being developed.

I laughed loud enough to disturb this guy eating...

You happy now? Lol

That last bit had me laughing so hard and flashing back to high school. Thanks!

that her first time gets them almost caught by her dad-LOL

At first, I was like "Eww, in his car?". But I have to be mindful that they ARE teenagers and were else are they gonna go? I think you have to be 21 to get a room. Besides, plenty of my friends lost their virginity in the back seat. I guess I would have prefered a parentless home. Or not, as I am reminded that I lost mine while his parents were alseep on the second floor.

Wow, her dad is there? I am embarrassed for her.

Just a quick word on 'popping of cherry'. The hymen is NOT located inside the vagina, it is located near the labia minora which is near the vaginal orifice. Until recently, I was just as misinformed but a quick look on google web and images about hymen cleared things up. Great story by the way.

I really wasn't sure I would like this at first, but as it goes on I'm starting to get into it. I hope Logan is for real and not just perpetuating the act to get what he wants from Lauren. We'll see. I've gotta find out what happens with her dad though.

if u do a story like this again have the guy blackmail the girl so she doent really lose her will

I'm enjoying it but you should get a proofreader for sentence structure...whew is it hot in here