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Your writing lacks simple words, like "the" and "are", but includes longer words, like "incentive" and "demonstrate". The overall effect is like I'm reading a transcript from a parody of Rocky and Bullwinkle, in which Moose and Squirrel take secret plans from safe, and use them for sex toy. Come, Boris, we go now to touch our kinky Russian no-no place.