You did a good job of showing attitude and personality, and building excitement. I think stories are much more erotic when you have some sense of the characters, and you managed to do that without a bunch of dry exposition. Great first effort!
The writing has a lovely rhythm, the story evolves with a just right combination of reality and surreality.
Funny that the coward/hater/anonymous/self-loather found the one paragraph that set him off. One cannot help but wonder why those pitiful trolls don't stop reading these stories.
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Anonymous01/29/13
Wow!
Enjoyed this a lot. A brazen and promiscuous slut just asking to be used by guys like me. Unmarried and rapidly making herself unmarriagable too so no complications. I'll bring the oh-so-necessary condoms. Where can I find parties like this one?
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Anonymous01/30/13
Hey Anonymous
WTF. I'll marry her. We'll have more fun in 1 hour than you will in a year .
Wow, You absolutely hot, brazen, little exhibitionist you. You make me so hard.
I love your stories. Please keep telling them. Should you ever decide to just wander about, naked out in public, I'll be right there with you, step for step the whole way!
English
Hot
Very good story. I enjoyed reading.
Great first effort
Nice to read stories from a woman's perspective. I liked your voice - kind of hipster-chick - it was fun. You should do more.
Awesome!
Good hot little story; very nice combination of public humilation and titillation. Love to read more!
Nice writing style
You did a good job of showing attitude and personality, and building excitement. I think stories are much more erotic when you have some sense of the characters, and you managed to do that without a bunch of dry exposition. Great first effort!
Hot story with a very different voice
The writing has a lovely rhythm, the story evolves with a just right combination of reality and surreality.
Funny that the coward/hater/anonymous/self-loather found the one paragraph that set him off. One cannot help but wonder why those pitiful trolls don't stop reading these stories.
Wow!
Enjoyed this a lot. A brazen and promiscuous slut just asking to be used by guys like me. Unmarried and rapidly making herself unmarriagable too so no complications. I'll bring the oh-so-necessary condoms. Where can I find parties like this one?
Hey Anonymous
WTF. I'll marry her. We'll have more fun in 1 hour than you will in a year .
oh god hot.
Wow, You absolutely hot, brazen, little exhibitionist you. You make me so hard.
I love your stories. Please keep telling them. Should you ever decide to just wander about, naked out in public, I'll be right there with you, step for step the whole way!
Your fan,
N1
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