Non-Erotic Feedback Portal

Load newRequesting new commentsRequesting new commentsNo new comments, try later

Latest 15 Reader Comments

Strange. Grantland Rice you aren't.

And there weren't any horsemen despite the stories beginning. It simply wasn't entertaining to read. You didn't write anything compelling and she wasn't an interesting character. At the end I just didn't care what happened.

You got me!

The setup was great...you lined your pins in a row and knocked the all down with the last paragraph.

Kudos!

Short and sweet

A sweet short romance. A nice change.

Good

Really Horror story and a frightening one.

You go girl!

Love the stories and am glad you are so happy in yourself.

about every 6 months

have to read this magnificent piece again and again.
5 stars******

a lot of us have been down this road

and wife comes back and later find out wifer has not been pure as the driven snow... secrets will leak out... 4 stars because a lot of us have been here

pain

Real, emotional pain. Powerful words, Jon. Excellent story.

One needs to look for red flags when they date. They were present here. I don't mind the scumbag dying, but this situation should have been avoided.

NOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

No reconciliation on this one, please!!! Come on!

2*

where does Allie come from? twist for the sake of a twist.

Girl Writers Rock!

Wow... Great first chapter!

Developing characters is so important and so often neglected by most writers here. You, however, really do a great job letting us see inside and feel who these people are.

BTW I love a good phrase that gives you and insight into who the character is, and with this one you did a great job: "It's possible that I orchestrated it; I don't remember ... okay, I DO remember, but I'm not telling."

To me it says, 'clever, fun loving girl, witty and knows it (which is cool)'.

I can tell you love your characters just as much as me. Thanks for the first chapter!

asianToy

Totally Blown Away.

Well worth the read. Thank you. Can't believe I've missed this until today.

-V

Forgot your password?

Please wait

Change picture

Your current user avatar, all sizes:

Default size User Picture  Medium size User Picture  Small size User Picture  Tiny size User Picture

You have a new user avatar waiting for moderation.

Select new user avatar:

   Cancel