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by DonnaBeck

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Oldbear63Oldbear63over 9 years ago
Excellent writing

Put me right there, I could feel the heat. Enjoyed the description of the instructor

JWrenJWrenover 9 years ago

Old and new merged in atmospheric style.

tazz317tazz317over 9 years ago
PROGRESS AND EGRESS

hand in hand thru time immortal. TK U MLJ LV NV

HoneyAdoredHoneyAdoredover 9 years ago
I see it

A pretty picture with lovely observations

wakingDownwakingDownalmost 9 years ago
Well laid imagery

That clearly paints the scene. The line 'Weathered skin of leather' makes me happy. Simple, direct, clear, and shows exactly what you are presenting in the person's face and hands. The feel of the phrase is wonderful as well.

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Hi Lit - readers, It has been suggested that I give the order of the trilogy; Subway, Flower, and Runner Girl. I have two short stories on here as well. I am currently writing erotica. I expect the new piece to be out around the first of the year. Thank you for your intere...