All Comments on 'bite'

You presented this really well. I can almost feel the heat of his exhaust on my neck. A little too much telling here, but this is a short poem, so it's pretty hard to fit all you want to say into so few words. Maybe, try writing a new poem just concentrating on the bite. The other sensations as his teeth sink in need explanation too. I'd like to feel the sear and tear in empathy with the narrator and if you work at finding appropriately descriptive nouns, you'd have a really heady poem. As it is, this one's good. This poem is mentioned on the New Poems Review Thread in the Poetry Feedback and Discussion forum on the Literotica Bulletin Boards. Thanks for sharing, Carrie.