All Comments on 'Dubious'

and interesting commentary on need - in this case the need of one leading to tolerance of the needs of the other, silently.

is a very old Bengali proverb which my Mother was prone to use durin' my childhood : thnx Demure for bringin' back happy memories ! Also the powerful simile of makin' love Head turned away & feelin' used is a very vivid word picture : well-written .

who would starve in a super market. TK U MLJ LV NV

...comes in many guises, doesn't it? Emotional abuse is the most painful kind, because there is no salve but love, which is sadly lacking in this depiction. Well done, again!

here is what bothers me,

Rather starved in love's field, good opener, after that there is really nothing for the reader to hold on too. I almost never do this because it is a truism, but it all is rather abstract, isn't it?

Now, the last three lines are dead, they almost could be prefaced with: the patient said...

for them to work at all you need something quite more than

sight of your brother's

secretive snaps induced you

there is a flatness in the writing, that could be mistaken for poetic walk throughs

5 any way

Not every poem needs the flash and glam of figurative language, or the intrigue of spectacular form. Sometimes, plain is powerful. Witness this one:

This Is Just To Say

by William Carlos Williams

I have eaten

the plums

that were in

the icebox

and which

you were probably

saving

for breakfast

Forgive me

they were delicious

so sweet

and so cold

Sometimes, to strain for poetic artifice is unnecessary and pompous, and readers recognize the arrogance of it, don't you think? More significantly, discerning readers are offended by it.

really?