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A beautiful poem that expresses very well the joys of submission. Your Dom is very lucky!

I've read this a couple of times, with a couple of days between readings. I like the idea but feel many of the stanzas are weak:

For one, I think each stanza is simply repeating the same message with a slightly different metaphor. Because you use so many competing metaphors without furthering the information the poem is diluted and weakened. It would be better to stick with one strong metaphor and reduce the poem drastically in length. That way the metaphor and poem will have more impact. It will be punchier and resonate with the reader. There is one strong stanza, to my mind, I would have your poem thus:

Master Sculpter

I am the material, my Master sculpts,

He shapes my beauty, bad traits he culls,

Making me stunning, not lustreless, dulled,

Without his chisel, life would be null.

I've changed a couple of words to fit better with the scuplting metaphor:

This is your original angle within the poem. The other metaphors I felt to be cliched and weak.

Good luck with your future writing.

The art of poetry seems to be fading in our present day, although you have successfully created a descriptive work that truly raises the bar to a higher standard.