All Comments on 'love's liquifaction'

going on in here. I think it could be pared down, but I do like the comparison to the orgasm and the magma. You have a lot of good phrases in this work. Good imagination that could be formed better in time. Give it a while, let it sit, then go back and read it aloud and listen to what it is telling you about itself. You will know what it needs when the time is right. :) I enjoyed the read.

~ maria

My kind of poetry......well done!