by LilDarlin
I always enjoy reading your poems, LilDarlin. Keep on writing them, especially your erotic ones. I'll keep on reading them.
almost gasping pace of this poem, but feel it is a bit repetitive and could bebefit from some trimming. Nonetheless, a heartfelt write and read.
I've said before Lil how you have a way of bringing words to life and you have not dissapointed me with this. What alot of people may not know is that a broken heart is more than just a metaphor it is physically painful, a gut wrenching feeling of intense pain and loss. I felt that in your poem, I felt the pain and thought you did a wonderful job with this one. So real and beautifully written.
Love the way this flowed into the emotion of poem~
From a 'jewel' of a poet~
excellent little piece
filled with pain;
verse raw writ,
it's all here
pain
hurt
loss
~