All Comments on 'Neverending Submission'

Substantially overwritten, in my view. This poem would stronger if you left more to the reader's imagination.

Drop by the Poetry Feedback & Discussion Forum and join some of the discussions there-- I think you will grow as a poet.

Fly

I would have to agree with Fly.

A lil overwritten, but I love

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Good wording ... ~

Do not give up. I like it,

just needs a lil trimming.

More Please ~

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Now this is what I call LOADED;

a lifetime in one poem.

I concur with Fly and RhymeFairy -

go join in at the Poetry Feedback and Discussion Forum.

If there's one thing poets love to do nearly as much as writing poetry, it is helping other poets write theirs.

With all the power behind your words, give it a shot; you should blow us all away in no time at all.