All Comments on 'New Moon Waiting'

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jthserrajthserraalmost 20 years ago
An interesting depth

to the darkened skies beneath the new moon. The metaphor of the patient new moon, awaiting the light to reveal its true dimension was a nice nuance. I thought perhaps the wording could be trimmed some in areas, but everything did work.

I loved the use of "verdancy" here:

"The stars surely would appease the longing

Set into their lush verdancy

Blooming into a super nova"

I haven't thought of stars as verdant, but this unique look works very well. Very nicely done.

jim : )

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