All Comments on 'Note'

Overly and oh so temperate, although chocolate can also stain.

This is in the same vein as a lot of your poetry, clean, well written paired back enough as to allow a reader room to place themselves at either side of the narration

The dichotomy I’d hope/waiting for rejection is very relatable

throwing you feelings on a desk and hoping

Trying to brush aside the hope by adding the layer of self deprication

In the lines

Like some chocolate or bird shit

The duality in this simple phrasing ratchets up the narrators tension

to the act and attempts to be dismissal of the offering

But at the end there is still hope..

Nice engaging and polished

Thanks

There's a lot of good poetry hidden here and there on Lit, but every once in a while you'll find one that is as good a poem as any poem can be. This one is pretty near to perfect. Warm and kind and smart and earnest and funny, and then clever on top of all of the rest: the poem itself is the note left on the desk, which gives an Escher's hands feeling to the whole thing. And then that last line brings the house down with a mic drop. Billy Collins, eat your heart out.

Tzara makes this place better just by being here. Thank you.